Revolution [Sin City Saint]

[Sin City Saint]

[In a dimly lit Las Vegas strip bar, seated around the corner from the door, is The Sin City Saint. A long neck of Miller Light in front of him. With glazed over eyes and a breath reaking of alcohol, The Sin City Saint spins the bottle atop the bar. He looks up into the air and lets out a long sigh. He rubs his unshaven face and reaches for the bottle. Taking a sip, he remembers back to last Sunday where he suffered a defeat at the hands of The Creeper.]

[Sin City Saint] So close....yet so far away. Last Sunday, I put my entire bank roll on that match. The point was set and then I rolled that dreaded seven. Why? Why, oh why? I was so close. I was so close to achieving that rung of success in this business, that only a few can say they have. Only the chosen can claim to. A claim for which The Sin City Saint was just inches from his grasp.

[The Sin City Saint finishes his Miller and signals the bar keep for another.]

[Sin City Saint] But the higharchy has seen fit to give me another opportunity. Opportunities are so far and few between. So for this chance....this opportunity....I plan to make the most of. I will not let this one slip away. This Sunday marks the day that begins my revolution. A revolution within the war. The same war that I have raged in Valor since day one. Juba, you have drawn arms. You will be the first casualty in this war. The first that will have to face facts. To understand and believe in. This war of reacclamation. I seek out the NA Title. I seek out this accolade that becomes, but a trophy to a man like Creeper. Juba, this Sunday, I seek you out in this war. For my revolution begins. For my revolution is tailored to. Juba.....be careful what you seek. For it might seek you first. Saint's Honor.

[The bar keep brings another cold one out to The Sin City Saint. He pops the top and places the bottle in front of Saint, taking the empty away. Saint lifts it up into the air and takes a drink.]

[Valor CEO]

ok I am going to be straight forward with you on this. This rp wasnt bad but it left me wanting more, maybe that was the concept of this rp, but I believe you couldve done so much more with it, I think for the length of it, it was good, but all I know is Juba loves to rp and I believe he should show up this sunday, and with a rp like this I think he could have the upper hand, but knowing you for the period that I have I believe you can pull off this win and I wish you the best of luck doing so.

Immune

[voodoo]

admin said:

ok I am going to be straight forward with you on this. This rp wasnt bad but it left me wanting more, maybe that was the concept of this rp, but I believe you couldve done so much more with it, I think for the length of it, it was good, but all I know is Juba loves to rp and I believe he should show up this sunday, and with a rp like this I think he could have the upper hand, but knowing you for the period that I have I believe you can pull off this win and I wish you the best of luck doing so.

Immune

I am going to agree with mr. Immune on this one, this rp was lacking something maybe like he said, left me wanting more and I believe you are going to bring more but that is just me and I also hope juba rps for your match because if you dont rp it isnt as fun for your opponents it is default which suck. good luck.

[Hardcastle]

I'm gonna agree with Immune on this. This rp was short and left me wanting more. I think there were a lot of things you could have expanded on and make a better rp. I hate to say it, but I think you missed the boat with this one.

[Bailey]

I liked this one Saint, but it was short, and I wanted more. The amount you did write was put together very well though.

[Bailey]

I liked this one Saint, but it was short, and I wanted more. The amount you did write was put together very well though. But like Hardcastle said, it felt uninspired, like you're in a rut. Hope you can dig your way out of it though.